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Shadowed Tunnel by RachBurns Shadowed Tunnel by RachBurns
Now! Completely finished!

...didn't expect the tunnel to have been violet. But hey, it does work! And thanks to garrusgem for tips on how to highlight the character. ^^
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This whole place stinks of stalfos... the Oracle thought, stepping through a portal of shadow and casting a wary eye around. A rush of footsteps from the other end of the tunnel alerts him just in time to draw his sword and send a burst of his magics to the incoming creatures!
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Environment
I'm critiquing this in 2 halves, the first is environment.

The floor has reflections from the torches, and if that is the case it would have more, obvious reflection, from the walls and character. Light is complex, you have the terminator ( band of shadow), reflective light and occlusions to think of, I would google particular links but my boyfriend is playing Dota and it'll lag his game!! Haha, so for light I suggest googling light theory for art.

I don't understand the blue exit, why? There should be things there, you shouldn't skip things, it'll weaken your art.

The flames don't look like fire, also the light on the wood is too light, there would be heavy shadows, across the wall.

The walls are way too, basic, there is no texture, no lumps and bumps, its not very hard to do with paint, and I suggest looking up some basic plain walls, and seeing the texture.

Your scenery is very muddy, the painting is muddy. Whatever the reason I don't know, but you need to KNOW things, know light, know how it would be. Get a candle in a dark room and see what lights up, those flames wouldn't light the entire room, it would be dark.

Character
I'm not going to go too much into anatomy, you need to do some life drawing daily, there is nothing I can really say. However, composition wise, it makes no sense, granted you look at the character due to the perspective, its not very, well, significant. The character is like, yo, dramatic pose, buuut you can't really see me.

The lighting, again is wrong. I think you should look into colour theory, I think there are programs where you have 3 lights, red, blue and green, and can see how colours work together, how a blue and brown would mix.

Colour wise, the entire piece is weak, there is no depth, things far away go faded, I think if you were to do a long hall way, this is important to note.

Overall its okay, but you have a lot of weaknesses. I'm telling you on the over all however, don't spend any longer on this piece, do some anatomy practice, then try a new piece, keeping a hold of the information I noted.

What you should study:
Anatomy, form, foreshortening
Light theory, transformer band, occlusion, reflective light, etc.
Texture, this can make things come to life! Seriously
Research - all your pieces scream I DO NOT KNOW HOW TO RESEARCH!! Go open google, google tiled floor, know WHAT material things are, so it can be consistent.

And, don't leave massive blue gaps behind, just makes no sense. Make something behind, heck, make it a corner, just do something. The negative space isn't used properly, thus, seems incomplete.

Hope this helps, its a LONG critique, and there are a lot of things that I've pointed out, it sucks, I know, but I'm doing it to encourage your artwork, to strengthen you as an artist, so take it bite by bite. Heck, don't read it all, small, little chunks, read what I said in each paragraph and see where I am coming from.

Oh, and research your favorite artists, make copies, keep a piece of their work open while you work on yours, see how they tackle problems, it'll give you a better understanding.

Hope this helps.

:)
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TonyJeffers Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2014  Student
I like how you painted the flames here they really stand out very striking. Nice use of perspective here as well with your leading lines leading back to the character.
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RachBurns Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I've been thinking about redoing this piece since there's a couple things I'd like to fix. Do you have any suggestions for when I do?
And thank you so much about the flames! When I rework the pic, I'm definitely going to keep them samey as this one. (Especially since they were so fun!)
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TonyJeffers Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Student
My first suggestion would be to get a good tunnel or cave reference. I find that a good reference can help with ideas and accurate execution. The only other suggestion would be to bring the character closer he seems a bit in the back. That way you can play more with the fire lighting on his skin and clothing. Have fun with it hope that helped:juggle:
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RachBurns Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You did help! I can see what you suggest fixing some of the problems this piece has.

If I bring him forward, maybe I can show hints of something being in front of him--the camera with a 'between the knees' kind of shot that old westerns were always fond of. (I wish I could ask those actors how annoying it was. :lol:) And maybe I could either show what's on the other end of that tunnel or close it up as if he'd been cornered somewhere.
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TonyJeffers Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Student
Sounds like you have some great ideas glad I could help:juggle::hug:
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RachBurns Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:hug: Thank you for your help, too. ^^ This next attempt's going to be great. 
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flameguitarcody Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
not bad what I can say is either the floor and the character should be lighted up a little more on the left [ and should have a slight lighting on the right side around the arm] or he should have less light on the left side of the character. Still its a pretty good painting far better than any painting I could do keep it up.
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RachBurns Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Probably should have more light in general. :nod: This one was the first time I tried to play with such darker colors in one place.

Thanks so much for the critique though! Maybe when I try him again I can focus on that and then try to have the 'camera' between an enemy's leg or something. ^^
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Amazon7 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yes I like it alot too actually. It is very well blended in color :)
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RachBurns Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you so much! ^^ The colors were pretty fun to work with.
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LaLunatique Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like it. THe pose is awesome and the atmosphere so well done!
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RachBurns Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you. ^_^ Can't wait til I get things done well enough to come back and rework this one--so many ideas and I have so much stuff to learn/relearn. XD
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LaLunatique Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm always so glad to meet with passionate artists like you are. I'm sure you will get better and better very fast :D Continue your good work
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RachBurns Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I hope I get better at all. :giggle: It took me ages just to get to this point.
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pinkpotatochips Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Professional Photographer
Awesome work! The perspective is just spot on and I really like the effect of the fire. Well done!
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RachBurns Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you so much! This is the first one I've ever had any of this really work as it has. ^_^
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pinkpotatochips Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Professional Photographer
Yay! Well good job and keep it up! :highfive:
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MagicMoonBird Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Very cool work I really like the light comming from the torches! :D
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RachBurns Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you so much. ^^ Especially for that fav. And I'm so happy you like it!
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MagicMoonBird Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You are more than welcome! :glomp:
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roamingtigress Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012
I love the perspective! Nice effect with the lighting.
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RachBurns Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you! ^^ I was running blind with that lighting, wasn't sure at all how it should have looked.
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roamingtigress Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012
You are very welcome :)
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carl0s-Ru1Z Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
nice depth :clap:
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RachBurns Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you so much. It was pure accident, I'm not usually this good. XD
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stipend Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012   General Artist
wow, i really like the flame and the lighting throughout the piece!
your figures proportions appear correct too :) (about 7-8 heads tall)
are you going to make the ceiling spine look like bone? (that would be cool!)
it's really coming along nicely, this is my favorite piece of yours thus far :D
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RachBurns Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
And it's finished! Finally. XD So very happy to see this one finally come to an end. And it keeps asking me if I want to make this a print. :giggle:

Can't help but love how the ceiling finally came out! And that entrance is something I didn't expect either. XD Sounds silly coming from the artist, don't you think?
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stipend Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012   General Artist
nice! just skip the print setup by clicking to navigate elsewhere on dA (like your main page)
hmm... it may be different for you though, my account is basic.

ya, good ceiling (basic black entrance, but it gets the job done!)
how is it silly? :confused:
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RachBurns Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It has options to just view the piece. :nod: Tis irritating though. XD

And hm. I just updated it a little, finished with things. The entrance actually turned out being a touch violet. Tis what I was laughing at. ^^;
But I'm still very very happy to be done. XD
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stipend Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012   General Artist
ya, i wish i didn't have to manually avoid the print upload screen...
it does have a distinct glow of color to it :)
happy to be done, and happy with the result right? 'cause it's good!
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RachBurns Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Very happy with the result. ^^ I woke up today thinking that I'd imagined how pleased I was (because I was running on 4 hours sleep) and it makes me so happy that I wasn't imagining.
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stipend Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2012   General Artist
i've had times kinda like that,
work forever on something, thinking is awesome...
view it later and see that it isn't :XD:
that's great that this piece turned out a success :)
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RachBurns Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It usually takes about the time I get back online and see something again. :giggle: More often than not.

And thank you. ^^ I'm so happy it did, too.
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